The boy who had it all except for one thing
There once was a boy called Bob, he was rich and lived in Marion alone he thought he was happy on the outside but really he was sad and lonely . Bob d buildder (his full name)
Bob went outside and saw a small boy he was crying on a dark swing. Bob slowly walked to him and asked why are you crying the boy replied I have no family I live on the streets and my parents died from hunger because they gave the bit of food they had to me.Let me take you to my place and get you warmed up.why are you being so kind to me because your sad and lonely and you need help.
Bob finally got a friend and the boy got a warm home and food and lived happily ever after the end.
June 6, 2016 at 5:26 pm
Your story has a clear structure and fits easily within the genre of folk tale.
Your meaning is generally clear but remember to use speech marks and separate each piece of speech with a new line.